How is my sonnet? (threw it together in like an hour)?

You have the correct rhyme scheme for an Elizabethan sonnet, but lack the customary iambic pentameter which must govern each line. Also, you should try for a logical progression of argumentation that connects quatrains. Somehow, your reasoning here seems somewhat disconnected, perhaps because you seem to have eschewed enjambment altogether and composed a poem of exclusively end-stopped lines. But first, the meter. I did like the thinly veiled allusion to Act 1, scene 1 of Shakespeare's "A Midsummer Night's Dream" and the dialogue of Lysander and Hermia as the content of your poem makes it utterly appropriate (in the first line of your second quatrain). For a first sonnet, this isn't bad at all; your feet have now been set on the path, and you may begin your journey...