How could I replace these sentences?

Tori, a young girl from Seattle, was sleeping in her bed.. Until she heard a noise! There was a quiet crack of the door opening, then footsteps walking in the night. “Who’s there?" she said, "Dad?”, and then… BAM! Bill, Tori’s father, rushed upstairs to see Tori lying on the ground, lifeless, with a bullet through her chest. Bill, weeping at the sight, called 911.